Well, this is my last story for a few weeks as I really, REALLY need to push myself to write the end of my book.
It was a difficult one this time, as I wanted to write something humorous and cynical (should have been easy to write cynical stuff, that’s who I am!) but it completely changed as I wrote it, turning into something massively different.
Anyway, Madison’s story is here and I’d like to thank her once more for starting this wonderful group.
Mine is here…
Rainbow Memorial
“It’s beautiful, isn’t it?” Kel said to Yri, taking in the emerald fields and deep blue skies.
The sisters wandered down the rainbow bridge hand-in-hand, their bare feet tingling with every step and their plum-coloured hair floating on the breeze. The bridge was a small leak from their own bright world, the colours emerging through the clouds over Earth.
They came to the same spot every year, to where their mother was buried. She had been one of the first to come to Earth, falling in love with their mortal father, and she’d always wanted to be buried here.
They knelt at the base of the sole cherry blossom tree at the edge of the clearing, the name “Gia” carved into its slim trunk.
Through tears, the sisters shared memories of their mother until nightfall.
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May 18, 2012 at 1:11 pm
tollykit
Lovely story Gary.
Here’s mine
http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/rainbows-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction/
May 18, 2012 at 9:04 pm
Gary
Thank you. Always nice to try something new for a change.
May 18, 2012 at 1:15 pm
TheOthers1
Ah, I love the title and what a beautiful story. I totally said, “aw” nice job.
My attempt: https://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/17/fields-of-wildflowers/
May 18, 2012 at 9:08 pm
Gary
Honestly, the title was about as literal as possible. Couldn’t think of anything clever!
May 18, 2012 at 1:17 pm
Reading Pleasure
A lovely sad story, with a touch of the ‘other world’. I’m over here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-sinking-low/
May 18, 2012 at 9:12 pm
Gary
I do love my fantasy/sci-fi so I’ll always throw something in my stories!
May 18, 2012 at 1:47 pm
Sandra
Really nice, sad but not sentimental. Good one.
May 18, 2012 at 9:17 pm
Gary
It’s not my strongest point, writing something like this, but it’s where the prompt took me and I’m glad you enjoyed it!
May 18, 2012 at 2:01 pm
flyoverhere
beautiful emotion and imagery…..
May 18, 2012 at 9:18 pm
Gary
Thank you, I guess I had some to share today. 🙂
May 18, 2012 at 2:04 pm
rochellewisoff
Ethereal and lovely.
Here’s mine. http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/05/miracle.html
May 18, 2012 at 9:23 pm
Gary
I love the word “ethereal” so thank you for that! 🙂
Yours was wonderful too but for some reason I couldn’t comment on it.
May 18, 2012 at 2:07 pm
rainang
i really enjoyed this story. 🙂 http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-head-tripping/
May 18, 2012 at 9:36 pm
Gary
I’m happy that you did!
May 18, 2012 at 2:15 pm
erinleary
Gary, it was sweet and lovely and a little heart-breaking. I’m glad you didn’t go with cynical. Somehow the rainbow wanted something else.
Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/eirinn-go-brach/
May 18, 2012 at 9:40 pm
Gary
It’s not always easy to put a bit of yourself into a story, but that’s what happened this week and it’d be kinda nice if it was the rainbow’s will that pushed me into it. 🙂
May 18, 2012 at 2:18 pm
theforgottenwife
Wonderfully touching. I love it. I actually want to learn more about their world. Powerful visuals. Very nicely done. I know you came over and read mine (thank you!) and here’s my link for any of your readers that would like to check mine out: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers-2/
May 18, 2012 at 9:41 pm
Gary
I may visit their world myself, should the prompt arrive to take me there some day. Or perhaps just to expand on what’s written here.
Thanks for taking the time to read my little story.
May 18, 2012 at 2:43 pm
elmowrites
Very touching and light, Gary. I’m sure you can come back and be cynical next week!
I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/friday-fiction-the-lie-of-the-land/
May 18, 2012 at 9:43 pm
Gary
I’ll certainly be back in a few weeks to resume my cynical take on things!
May 18, 2012 at 3:13 pm
susielindau
I love the descriptions and the “plum colored hair.” Very nice!
Good luck with the writing. I get caught up in blogging too and need to finish my rewrite….
May 18, 2012 at 3:15 pm
susielindau
Here is mine BTW!
Without a Doubt?
May 18, 2012 at 9:49 pm
Gary
I liked the idea of the girls being from another world, so the hair colour was just a simple and subtle way of showing that. Glad you liked it.
And thanks for the encouragement, I do hope to get much closer to finishing the first draft!
May 18, 2012 at 3:22 pm
jeninesilos
what a lovely sisters….
anyways,here’s mine: http://writeforacause.org/2012/05/18/friday-fictioneers-answered-prayer/
Please feel free to check it out…^_______^
May 18, 2012 at 9:52 pm
Gary
Thank you for reading!
May 18, 2012 at 3:33 pm
profblanketsmum
Lovely description to an emotional snippet of time in someone elses life. Actually made me cry. Beautiful. Well done. x
May 18, 2012 at 9:53 pm
Gary
Thanks Helen, I never realised it would bring forth real emotion!
I guess I just had a little emotion to share, which is maybe why the story ended up this way. 🙂
May 18, 2012 at 4:55 pm
teschoenborn
Wonderful use of the ‘Gia’ mythology.
Here’s mine:http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/17/friday-fictioneers-luck-of-the/
May 18, 2012 at 9:58 pm
Gary
I’ll be honest, I have no idea what the Gia mythology is! I just used a name similar to my own mum’s – the inspiration behind this story.
May 18, 2012 at 5:36 pm
Brian Benoit
Nice one – great colorful descriptions (pun absolutely intended). Guess we both had trouble going dark with this one (I know I tried!)
Thanks for already commenting on mine. Here’s the link for your readers: http://pinionpost.com/2012/05/18/wake-up-where/
May 18, 2012 at 9:59 pm
Gary
Puns are always appreciated! 🙂
Definitely couldn’t find the darker, cynical side of this one.
May 18, 2012 at 5:59 pm
oni1138
beautiful, you feeling alright? ;p
May 18, 2012 at 10:03 pm
Gary
I know, right! Totally not normal of me to write this kind of thing.
May 18, 2012 at 7:14 pm
Brandon Scott
This one was difficult for me too. Good luck with the end of your book!
My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/facade/
May 18, 2012 at 10:04 pm
Gary
Thanks, I think I might need that luck! 🙂
May 18, 2012 at 10:57 pm
Janet
Good luck with finishing your novel. I’m doing the same thing myself.
May 19, 2012 at 6:59 pm
Gary
Good luck to you too! It’s taken the better part of five years to get this written (my first novel – started writing it before I even realised that I wanted to be a writer!) so it’s about time I finished it. 🙂
May 20, 2012 at 3:39 am
Janet
Sounds like we’re on the same five year plan!
May 19, 2012 at 12:59 am
rich
aww. honorable girls. mom would be proud.
May 19, 2012 at 7:01 pm
Gary
Thanks, I hope so.
May 19, 2012 at 3:12 am
Lora Mitchell
I’m not into fantasy…but I loved this. Beautiful, sweet and touching fable. Nice work. Good luck with your novel and hurry back. Here’s mine:
http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com
May 19, 2012 at 7:04 pm
Gary
I love fantasy/sci-fi so I always try to include it in some way. I’m glad it still worked for you!
Thanks for the well-wishes too, I hope to be back in two or three weeks at the most. Just gotta get my head down and work…
May 19, 2012 at 5:10 pm
Anonymous
This was one of your best stories for me. I found it very touching. I love the idea of two worlds coming together. You have so many different ways of interpreting the prompt and I always enjoy your vivid descriptive writing. 🙂
May 19, 2012 at 5:13 pm
janpoulton
Hi again. Sorry but I hadn’t logged in. The above comment is from jan. 🙂
May 19, 2012 at 7:06 pm
Gary
Thanks Jan, your opinion means a lot.
It ended up being a more personal story than I intended. I guess the addition of the otherworldly stuff just helps it become something more…fictional. 🙂
May 20, 2012 at 9:18 pm
Kathy McClure
I also gave an ‘awwww’ as I read. So sweet and, quite naturally, makes me want to know more of the mother’s world and the girls’ father. So pretty.
Kathy
http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/18/after/#comment-210
May 21, 2012 at 9:25 pm
Gary
I shall add this story to the growing number of new ideas to explore further! This Friday Fictioneers thing keeps on giving.
Thank you for reading and commenting, I really appreciate it. 🙂
May 21, 2012 at 12:27 am
Andy Flood
Wow Gaz, your most powerful and affecting story yet. Your writing goes from strength to strength. This is beautiful. I love the imagery and the ‘feel’ of it. I was deeply moved when I read this. You have a gift for communicating through your writing. It seems almost as if there was only ever one response to this prompt. Lovely. I’m very proud of you and I’m sure others closer to you would be too 🙂
(I’m very sorry for such a late response. Things have been… hectic and I wanted to give this the attention it deserves.)
Andy
May 21, 2012 at 9:29 pm
Gary
Thanks Andy. Your feedback is welcome (and very appreciated) no matter when it arrives!
It was definitely a more personal story than intended, and perhaps a fitting one to end on…at least for a couple of weeks. Hopefully we’ll see you back here then, too! 🙂